I mistakenly inferred from the following clause that a parent extended public key plus a child private key would be equivalent to knowing the extended child private key---meaning that the parent private key was still secure:
knowledge of the extended public key + any non-hardened private key descending from it is equivalent to knowing the extended private key
This patch's addition of the word "parent" (twice) removes the ambiguity and may help other readers draw the correct inference that the parent private key is no longer secure in this case.
I also changed "+" to "plus" to avoid confusion with the actual mathematical operations used in this BIP.